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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 16 조회 14328

About movies

작성자: 1597145 담당 튜터: Philip
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I usually like all kinds of movies even melodrama.
I particulary hate horror movies. When I was younger, I watched The Grudge and I as traumatized.
I was afraid of the images and the sounds from that movie.
I have a weak stomach and I can't watch gruesome and bloody films
, so I canot watch horror movies
I could get the courage to watch a whole horror movie without closing my eyes or screaming.

I like action films the best
I like them because they are exciting and thrilling
I can get red of my stress with lots of fight scenes.
The plot is usually simple, so I don't have to think too much.
I mean It doesn't require much effort to understand the plot.
I can just sit down and enjow the movie.
My favorite action movies is Mr&Mrs Smith.
튜터 교정 답변

I usually like all kinds of movies even melodrama.

-> I usually like all kinds of movies even melodramas.

I particulary hate horror movies.

-> Good sentence

When I was younger, I watched The Grudge and I as traumatized.

-> When I was younger, I watched "The Grudge" and I was traumatized.

I was afraid of the images and the sounds from that movie.

-> Good sentence

I have a weak stomach and I can't watch gruesome and bloody films, so I canot watch horror movies.

->  I have a weak stomach and I can't watch gruesome and bloody films, thus I cannot watch horror movies.

I could get the courage to watch a whole horror movie without closing my eyes or screaming.

-> I couldn't get the courage to watch a whole horror movie without closing my eyes or screaming.

I like action films the best.

-> Good sentence

I like them because they are exciting and thrilling.

-> Good sentence

I can get red of my stress with lots of fight scenes.

->  I can get rid of my stress with its lots of fight scenes.

The plot is usually simple, so I don't have to think too much.

-> Good sentence

I mean It doesn't require much effort to understand the plot.

-> I mean it doesn't require much effort to understand the plot.

I can just sit down and enjow the movie.

-> I can just sit down and enjoy the movie.

My favorite action movies is Mr&Mrs Smith.

->  My favorite action movies is "Mr & Mrs Smith."

 

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Hello Lisa,

I like watching movies at times but these days movies have become so commercialized and too Scifi. I tend to ahte horror movies as well but there are some good horror movies out that. That is a strange idea but there are. I tend to dislike action movies because of their shallowness. I like movies with thick and interesting plots. I watch movies for the story line more.

To that extent I believe that people should watch whatever they like as long as it makes them entertained.

Keep up the great work!

Teacher Philip

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