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작성자: ssg1_024323 담당 튜터: Daya1
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I really love to use Facebook. It's because it has a lot of functions. In addition to that, most of my friends and co-warkers have its acoount, so I can check what they enjoy thesedays.
I like posting photos of food as a foodie when I have a good and fresh gourmet on a table or go to a new restaurant. Whenever I upload photos, my friend give some feedback.
Facebook is a good way to make memorable records in my life and share those with my friends.
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I really love to use Facebook. It's because it has a lot of functions. In addition to that, most of my friends and co-warkers have an acoount, so I can check what they enjoy thesedays.
I like posting photos of food, as a foodie when I have a good and fresh gourmet on a table or go to a new restaurant. Whenever I upload photos, my friend give's some feedback.
Facebook is a good way to make memorable records in my life and share those with my friends.

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