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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 16 조회 13899

my house~

작성자: 1102044240 담당 튜터: Paula
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I live in Seoul 고덕동.
I moved to here last December and previously I lived in 암사동.
I moved to this place because there are good schools with high reputations.

My house was built in 1996 so is a bit old.
The problem with the house built in 1990s is that they did not consider much about insulation.
Meaning, it gets really cold in winter.
However, we have good environment as it has a big supermarket, schools and parks near by.
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I live in Seoul 고덕동.

I moved to here last December and previously I lived in 암사동.

-> I moved here last December and I previously lived in 암사동.

I moved to this place because there are good schools with high reputations.

My house was built in 1996 so is a bit old.

-> My house was bulit in 1996 so it is a bit old.

The problem with the house built in 1990s is that they did not consider much about insulation.

Meaning, it gets really cold in winter. However, we have good environment as it has a big supermarket, schools and parks near by.

-> Meaning, it gets really cold in winter. However, we have a good environment and it has a big supermarket, schools and parks nearby.

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