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My senior works very hard.
He always work until late night and he even comes to the office every weekends.
This maybe good for the company as he appears to be hard working person for the sake of the company, but on the other hand this kind of behavior kills juniors like me.
Because we all have to follow his leaderships like staying until late night and comes to the office every weekends.


i graduated from 대유 university.
it is located in the east of side 경기도.
maybe, it is the nearest located in seoul.
대유 university is not reputation. but, all the student with free to study.
near the campus, there are many fine restaurants and shop
in the spring, the streets on campus turn yellow with a golden bell
so, view is a very beautiful.
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My senior works very hard. He always work until late night and he even comes to the office every weekends.

This maybe good for the company as he appears to be hard working person for the sake of the company, but on the other hand this kind of behavior kills juniors like me.

->This maybe good for the company as he appears to be a hard working person for the sake of the company, but on the other hand, this kind of character kills juniors like me.

Because we all have to follow his leaderships like staying until late night and comes to the office every weekends.

->Because we all have to follow his leadership like staying until late night and come to the office every weekends.

i graduated from 대유 university. it is located in the east of side 경기도. maybe, it is the nearest located in seoul.

-> I graduated from 대유 university. It is located in the east of side 경기도. It is the nearest school located in Seoul.

대유 university is not reputation. but, all the student with free to study. near the campus, there are many fine restaurants and shop in the spring, the streets on campus turn yellow with a golden bell so, view is a very beautiful.

-> 대유 university has a good reputation. All the students are free to study near the campus. There are many fine restaurants and shops. Every spring, the streets on campus turn yellow with a golden bell so the view is a very beautiful.

 

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Hello Bryan,

 Thank you for telling me about your work background. Well, being a hard worker is really a good character. So everyone must have it. Don't you think so? Just keep on writing because I really like to know you more. Have a great day. :)

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