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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 17 조회 14458

Concerts

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I really love to go concert of my favorite singer. My favorite singer is psy. Do you know kangnam style? He is an awesome singer in the world. He held concert once every years in Olympic stadium. i always go his concert with my friend in the end of year. His concert is so excited and interesting. Psy concert is so popular. I have to book a ticket in advance. Before I enter the concert, I have to wear casually to rock out at his concert. So I bought some water, too. After the show, my friend and I talk about the concert and we take a photo in front of the concert hall in memory.
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I really love to go concert of my favorite singer.

-> I really love to go to a concert of my favorite singer.

My favorite singer is psy.

-> My favorite singer is Psy.

Do you know kangnam style?

-> Do you know Kangnam Style?

He is an awesome singer in the world. (Good sentence)

He held concert once every years in Olympic stadium.

-> He holds a concert once every years in Olympic Stadium.

i always go his concert with my friend in the end of year.

-> I always go his concert with my friend at the end of the year.

His concert is so excited and interesting.

-> His concert is so exciting and interesting.

Psy concert is so popular.

-> Psy's concert is so popular.

I have to book a ticket in advance. (Good sentence)

Before I enter the concert, I have to wear casually to rock out at his concert. So I bought some water, too.

-> Before I enter the concert hall, I have to wear casual clothes to rock out at his concert and I bought some water too.

After the show, my friend and I talk about the concert and we take a photo in front of the concert hall in memory.

-> After the show, my friend and I talked about the concert and we took a photo in front of the concert hall for a souvenir.

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