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공개 첨삭 완료 2020. 10. 29 조회 10062

CITY LIFE 2

작성자: ssg1_024323 담당 튜터: Marilee1
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
People in the city try to escape from the city life and want to enjoy nature on the weekends.
I said Seoul is surrounded by a lot of mountains. So, people go hiking a mountain.
These days, it is the seaon of autumn colors, I really love this seson. So, whenever I have a time, I go hiking a mountain near my place. The mountain is very closed to my house, It takes just 20minuites by walking.
Except mountains, people go Han river and parks in the city. In other words, people want to escape from the city life on the weekends.
튜터 교정 답변

People in the city try to escape from the city life and want to enjoy nature on the weekends.
I said Seoul is surrounded by a lot of mountains. So, people go hiking in the mountains.
These days, it is the seaon of autumn colors, I really love this seson. So, whenever I have a time, I go hiking at a mountain near my place. The mountain is very closed to my house, It takes just 20 minuites by walking.
Except mountains, people go to the Han river and parks in the city. In other words, people want to escape from the city life on the weekends.

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