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공개 첨삭 완료 2020. 11. 10 조회 10324

cover letter

작성자: tracyyhan 담당 튜터: Lisa1
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I'm excited to be applying for the Renewable Energy Contract Manager position. As someone with strong passion in renewable energy, I thrive on keeping projects running smoothly from initial permit to commissioning stage. I'm eager for the opportunity to use my experiences to join and move forward....

I have huge experiences in managing contract sets including FIDIC and my skills as a contract manager will be a significant asset for your team's current and future needs. I am committed to execute targets and willing to support other colleagues to reach the final goal of the project.
튜터 교정 답변

I am excited to be applying for the Renewable Energy Contract Manager position. As someone with a strong passion for renewable energy, I thrive on keeping projects running smoothly from obtaining the initial permit to the end of the commissioning stage. I am eager for the opportunity to use my experiences to join and move forward. (What are you joining or moving forward?)

I have 15 years of experience in managing contract sets, including FIDIC, and my skills as a contract manager will be a significant asset for your team's current and future needs. I am committed to executing (meeting?) goals and willing to support other colleagues to reach the final goal of the project.

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