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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 18 조회 13274

Watching movie

작성자: HWRC199690671 담당 튜터: Gabby
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학생 제출 원문
I went a multiplex theater with my husband last Friday.
We watched 'X-man, Days of future past', which is the last sequel of X-man series.
We could'nt have gone to movie for a while since my company gave to me a lot of work to do.
That movie was entertaining, moving and inspiring.
After watching movie, we went to 대학로 which is very famous street for young generation.
대학로 was packed with people who want to entertain friday night.
We had a great time after a long interval.
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I went a multiplex theater with my husband last Friday. We watched 'X-man, Days of future past', which is the last sequel of X-man series. We could'nt have gone to movie for a while since my company gave to me a lot of work to do. That movie was entertaining, moving and inspiring. After watching movie, we went to 대학로 which is very famous street for young generation. 대학로 was packed with people who want to entertain friday night. We had a great time after a long interval.

 

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CORRECTION:

1. I went a multiplex theater with my husband last Friday. We watched 'X-man, Days of future past', which is the last sequel of X-man series.

--> I went to a multiplex theater with my husband last Fridau to watch "X-Men, Days of Future Past", it is the last sequel of X-Men series.

(Your sentences should be complete,use proper conjunction. Make sure that the title of the movie is in proper spelling.)

 

2. We could'nt have gone to movie for a while since my company gave to me a lot of work to do. That movie was entertaining, moving and inspiring.

-->We could'nt have gone to movie for a while since my company gave me a lot of work to do. The movie was entertaining, moving and inspiring.

(This is a good sentences, you used simple words and constructed the sentences properly, good job!)

 

3. After watching movie, we went to 대학로 which is very famous street for young generation. 대학로 was packed with people who want to entertain friday night. We had a great time after a long interval.

--> After watching the movie, we went to 대학로 which is a very famous street for young people. 대학로 was packed with people who wants to go out every Friday night. We had a great time after a long time.

(Use articles, the and a)

 

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