Persuasion
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Hi, I am Evan.
You know what? They are comming. Band Blue is coming back again 10years after they announced their retirement.
You see, I really loved them when I was a university student.
If I go to the concert, it is like a time travel on a time machine. It would be really memorable event.
Please, don't let me go alone there.
If you go there toghether, I m gonna take you a great restaurant after the concert. I promise.
Of course, I definetly will pick you up at your place.
You know what? They are comming. Band Blue is coming back again 10years after they announced their retirement.
You see, I really loved them when I was a university student.
If I go to the concert, it is like a time travel on a time machine. It would be really memorable event.
Please, don't let me go alone there.
If you go there toghether, I m gonna take you a great restaurant after the concert. I promise.
Of course, I definetly will pick you up at your place.
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