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공개 첨삭 완료 2020. 12. 16 조회 10030

2020-12-16 (1)

작성자: dhkim1 담당 튜터: Neal2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
When I had conversations with a few JEINS employees concerning the personnel matter, I felt they were neither smart nor intellectual. They even couldn't logically write in Korean. I wondered how they could be hired and could take important positions. I soon found they were all Jeju locals. They were beneficiaries of nepotism. However, when I worked with Jeju locals who had passed the government official exams, I never felt the same.

I climbed Mt. Halla many times. Its height is about 2 km. When I got to near the summit, I could see rope railings. One day, after it snowed, I climbed it again.
튜터 교정 답변

When I had conversations with a few JEINS employees concerning the personnel matter, I felt they were neither smart nor intellectual. They even couldn't logically write in Korean. I wondered how they could be hired and could take important positions. I soon found they were all Jeju locals. They were beneficiaries of nepotism. However, when I worked with Jeju locals who had passed the government official exams, I never felt the same.

I climbed Mt. Halla many times. Its height is about 2 km. When I got to near the summit, I could see rope railings. One day, after it snowed, I climbed it again.  **

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