concert
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I like going to exciting concerts with electronic music DJs
I like going to clubs.
Therefore, I like to see the DJ concerts because they remind me of the club.
I usually enjoy these conserts with my friends.
I have some college friends who I usually go to these concerts with.
They also like electronic music.
I like to watch the concert in the very front.
It is very expensive, so I can't go often but it is much valuable than money.
Most of the time, these concerts have an open dance floor near the front.
I like standing on the open floor in the front because that is where all the action is.
We can dance and jump up to the music.
It is very exciting there with my friends and it feels like I become one with a group
I usually have to buy thos tickets when they first start to go on sale.
I have to buy them early because the open floor tickets sell out quickly.
I like going to clubs.
Therefore, I like to see the DJ concerts because they remind me of the club.
I usually enjoy these conserts with my friends.
I have some college friends who I usually go to these concerts with.
They also like electronic music.
I like to watch the concert in the very front.
It is very expensive, so I can't go often but it is much valuable than money.
Most of the time, these concerts have an open dance floor near the front.
I like standing on the open floor in the front because that is where all the action is.
We can dance and jump up to the music.
It is very exciting there with my friends and it feels like I become one with a group
I usually have to buy thos tickets when they first start to go on sale.
I have to buy them early because the open floor tickets sell out quickly.
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