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공개 첨삭 완료 2020. 12. 22 조회 10344

2020-12-22 (1)

작성자: dhkim1 담당 튜터: Neal2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Last Sunday morning, I was riding my bicycle at a high speed on a asphalt road. When I saw a bit high bump, I was going to minimize the impact that the front wheel would have. I jumped right before the bump and landed on it, in order to smoothly pass it. However, because I was at a high speed, my bike bounced on the bump, and I lost balance. I was thrown from my bike, and fell down on my right side on the road. I heard the sound that my bike made when it banged the road. I felt a hugh impact on the right side of my head.
튜터 교정 답변

Last Sunday morning, I was riding my bicycle at a high speed on a asphalt road. When I saw a bit high bump, I was going to minimize the impact that the front wheel would have. I jumped right before the bump and landed on it, in order to smoothly pass it. However, because I was at a high speed, my bike bounced on the bump, and I lost balance. I was thrown from my bike, and fell down on my right side on the road. I heard the sound that my bike made when it banged the road. I felt a hugh impact on the right side of my head. **

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