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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 19 조회 12700

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작성자: 1102044240 담당 튜터: Paula
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
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I like going camping.
I have purchased tents and copel and other equipments necessary for the camping last year.
I only could go for a camping once due to the office workload I have.
I feel guilty for my children for this, so I have decided to go for a camping at least twice this year.


I have a very close friend named 손 춘 식~.
We have been friends since elementary school called 봉천 at 6 grades.
He has short curly hair and he uses South dialects.
He has not humorous nor talkative to be looked attractive enough.
so, ha has not been married yet.
well, let me know if you have the right girl for me.
튜터 교정 답변

I like going camping.

I have purchased tents and copel and other equipments necessary for the camping last year.

I only could go for a camping once due to the office workload I have.

-> I could only go camping once due to my work.

I feel guilty for my children for this, so I have decided to go for a camping at least twice this year.

-> I feel guilty for my children, so I have decided to go camping at least twice this year.

I have a very close friend named 손 춘 식~.

We have been friends since elementary school called 봉천 at 6 grades.

-> We have been friends since 6th grade in 봉천.

He has short curly hair and he uses South dialects.

He has not humorous nor talkative to be looked attractive enough. so, ha has not been married yet. well, let me know if you have the right girl for me.

-> He doesn't have sense of humor and not attractive enough so up until now, he is not yet married. Well, let me know if you have the right girl for him.

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