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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 20 조회 14013

Watching a Movie

작성자: 1101160011 담당 튜터: Mitch2
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The most memorable movie I've watched is The 300 which is a series of actions films.
The story is about In the ancient battle of Thermopylae, king leoridas and 300 spartans fought to the death against xerxes and his massive person army.
Gerard battler played the first character in the first series.
This is my Favorite because it has great special effects and very dynamic battle scene.
While watching the movie, I felt extremely excited. I want to watch it again.
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[CORRECTION]

The most memorable movie I've watched is 300 which is a series of action films. The story is about the retelling of the ancient Battle of Thermopylae in which King Leonidas and 300 Spartans fought to the death against Xerxes and his massive Persian army. Gerard Butler played the first character in the first series. This is my favorite movie because it has great special effects and very dynamic battle scene. While watching the movie, I felt extremely excited. I want to watch it again.

[COMMENT]

Hello, Aaron! You were able to write a detailed answer about your favorite movie. 300 movie has a good story and I'm pretty sure that it's interesting. Unfortunately, I haven't watched it yet. Anyway, I want you to take note of your capitalization, verbs, prepositions and your spelling. Keep it up!

Have a great day,

-Teacher Mitch-

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