sports

I love going to watch sports games.

-> I love watching sports games.

Especially, I like to watch soccer matches.

-> Good sentence

After I met my husband. I attended my first soccer game for our date.

-> After I meeting my husband, I attended my first soccer game for our date.

He received 2 tickets to the Korean soccer league game from his company.

-> Good sentence

We attended the soccer game.

-> Good sentence

We didn't dressed up in red T-shirts, because it wasn't international game.

-> Good sentence

My husband purchased some thunder sticks and some foods like chicken and beers

-> Good sentence

It was the game against Hyundai.

-> Good sentence

During that game, the opposing team got many yellow cards and got a red card.

-> During that game, the opposing team got lots of yellow cards and also a red card.

Our team did really well in that game.

-> Good sentence

It was so exciting to see my favorite player on the field.

-> Good sentence.

It was also very fun to be a part of the crowd.

-> Good sentence

Our team fans were all cheering together as one and they made a lot of noise to cheer for our team.

-> Our team's fans were all cheering together as one and they made a lot of noises to cheer for our team.

A lot of people in the crowd were screaming, some were crying tears of joy.

-> A lot of people in the crowd were screaming, some were even crying tears of joy.

I felt great to be a part of that historical sports event.

-> Good sentence

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Hello Lisa,

 Thanks for the wonderful job with this composition. You were able to improve and at the same time instert good vocabularies into your answers. I also like watching sports because I am a lazy person. But despite that my attention span has become shorter in the past few years thanks to Facebook and Twitter.

Anyways, happy Friday!

Teacher Philip