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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 23 조회 14051

Dancing

작성자: 1102047346 담당 튜터: Chloe1
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I don’t have talent about dance. I know good dancer looks very cool. I’m not a good dancer. As I grow up, I don’t dance. However, I took a chance that I dance after I got a job. I prepared a kind of performance with my company friends as rookies. We could get a award if we would win in performance competition. Actually my role was not a dancer. Because of role replacement, I had to dance. Although I didn’t want it, my company friends asked me to be a dancer. That’s why I decided to do it. The song was “single lady” sung by Beyonce. The dancing members were guys. Even we dressed up and made up like Beyounce. I know, that was so disgusting. But, I enjoyed that time. After that, I became a cheer leader team member to prepare for the company festival. Unfortunately, I couldn’t do it because of the accident “Sewol”. But it is a memorable thing to me. I’m gonna join our company dance club. I practice once a week. I expect it! I don’t wanna be a good dancer. Just enjoy dancing!
튜터 교정 답변

Hello Jake! Happy Monday! Here are your corrections. ^_^

 

I don’t have a talent about dancing. I know a good dancer looks very cool. I’m not a good dancer. As I grow up, I don’t dance. However, I took the chance to dance after I got a job. I prepared a kind of performance with my company friends as rookies. We could get an award if we would win in the performance competition. Actually my role was not a dancer. Because of role replacement, I had to dance. Although I didn’t want it, my company friends asked me to be a dancer. That’s why I decided to do it. The song was “single lady” sang by Beyonce. The dancing members were guys. Even if we were dressed up and made up like Beyounce. I know, that was so disgusting. But, I enjoyed that time. After that, I became a cheer leader team member to prepare for the company festival. Unfortunately, I couldn’t do it because of the accident (“Sewol”). But it is a memorable thing for me. I’m gonna join our company dance club. I practice once a week. I expect it! I don’t wanna be a good dancer. Just enjoy dancing!

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