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공개 첨삭 완료 2021. 04. 15 조회 9968

The reason I use instagram

작성자: jisuson11 담당 튜터: Janet
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I always use instagram because It has lots of good functions. I can remind my favorite moments whenever I see my photos that I’ve posted. There are lots of my favorite photos with my friends at good places on my feed. Especially I have lots of photos of my exchange student life in Europe. I was able to post good moments on my instagram!
Furthermore, one of my hobbies is taking pictures so I really like editing my feed! Also other’s pictures inspire me a lot! When I find excellent post, I sometimes comment on that post, then I can communicate with the users.
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I always use instagram because It has lots of good functions. I can remind my favorite moments whenever I see my photos that I’ve posted. There are lots of my favorite photos with my friends at good places on my feed. Especially I have lots of photos of my exchange student life in Europe. I was able to post good moments on my instagram!
Furthermore, one of my hobbies is taking pictures so I really like editing my feed! Also other’s pictures inspire me a lot! When I find excellent post, I sometimes comment on that post, then I can communicate with the users.

 

I always use an Instagram because It has lots of good functions. It reminds me of my favorite moments whenever I see my photos that I've posted. There are lots of my favorite photos with friends at good places on my feed. Especially I have lots of photos of my exchange student life in Europe. I  was able to post good moments on my Instagram! Furthermore, one of my hobbies is taking pictures so I really like editing my feed! Also other’s pictures inspire me a lot! When I find excellent post, I sometimes comment on that post, then I can communicate with the users.

 

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