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공개 첨삭 완료 2021. 04. 20 조회 10402

Why I want to be a nurse

작성자: ahnseeun1225 담당 튜터: Trixie
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The reason why I want to be a nurse is that I want to provide mental and physical stability near patients. This is because it is important to treat patients, and also it is necessary to make them recover quickly . So I will create a pleasant environment and provide mental stability and I will check patient’s condition frequently so that patients can recover their health as soon as possible.
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The reason why I want to be a nurse is that I want to provide mental and physical stability near patients. This is because it is important to treat patients, and also it is necessary to make them recover quickly . So I will create a pleasant environment and provide mental stability and I will check patient’s condition frequently so that patients can recover their health as soon as possible.

 

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The reason why I want to become a nurse is that I want to provide  a mental and physical stability to the patients. This is because it is important to treat patients, and also it is necessary to make them recover quickly .   I will create a pleasant environment and provide mental stability and I will check the patient’s condition frequently so that the patients can recover  as soon as possible.

 

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