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공개 첨삭 완료 2021. 04. 29 조회 9347

the first birthday party in Korea

작성자: khj0307 담당 튜터: Carrie
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I'd like to talk about the first birthday party in Korea. The death rate was very high, so if babies went well and healthy through 1 year, we believe they become good labors. Fom that idea, people celebrate the first birthday. In addition, we have a special ceremony called a dol-job-i. Parents prepare some objects to symbolize the future; thread is meaning for longevity, micerophone is for celebrity and cash is for richness and so on. Next, parents place them in front of a baby and waiting what is picked up. And we memorize that ceremonies and give wishes to their prosperous future.
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I'd like to talk about the first birthday party in Korea. The death rate was very high, so if babies went well and healthy through 1 year, we believe they become good laborers. Fom that idea, people celebrate the first birthday. In addition, we have a special ceremony called dol-job-i. Parents prepare some objects to symbolize the future of their children; thread's

meaning is for longevity, microphone is for celebrity and cash is for richness and so on. Next, parents place them in front of the baby and wait what is picked up. And we memorize that ceremonies and give wishes to their prosperous future.

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