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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 25 조회 13201

Paula Sam( = Teacher )~~ Go easy on yourself. Don't work so hard.

작성자: 1102044240 담당 튜터: Paula
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
We have three bed rooms in total. The first one is a master bedroom.
It is for me and my wife. There is nothing but a big bed.
The second and third rooms are for my kids.
These rooms are filled with plenty of toys and books.

I usually have lunch with my colleagues in a cafeteria.
After lunch, we talk about business over coffee.
Sometimes, I take a nap during the lunch time. if i'm too tired.

Ten years ago, our division entered new staff.
I became a mentor of her.
But, now is became my wife.
Maybe, i became fond of her while working together with her.


I usually go to work by bike.
It takes about thirty minutes but if it rains I take a bus and
it takes good fifty minutes.

I work for a company called 삼성SDS.
It is a big company and has been so for about thirty years ago.
We mainly provide information and communication technology services
튜터 교정 답변

We have three bed rooms in total. The first one is a master bedroom. It is for me and my wife. There is nothing but a big bed. The second and third rooms are for my kids. These rooms are filled with plenty of toys and books.

-> We have three bed rooms in total. The first one is the master bedroom. It is for me and my wife. There is nothing but a big bed. The second and the third rooms are for my kids. These rooms are filled with plenty of toys and books.

I usually have lunch with my colleagues in a cafeteria. After lunch, we talk about business over coffee. Sometimes, I take a nap during the lunch time. if i'm too tired. Ten years ago, our division entered new staff. I became a mentor of her. But, now is became my wife. Maybe, i became fond of her while working together with her. I usually go to work by bike. It takes about thirty minutes but if it rains I take a bus and it takes good fifty minutes. I work for a company called 삼성SDS. It is a big company and has been so for about thirty years ago. We mainly provide information and communication technology services

-> I usually have lunch with my colleagues in a cafeteria. After lunch, we talk about business over coffee. Sometimes, I take a nap during the lunch time, if I'm too tired. Ten years ago, our division entered a new staff. I became her mentor. But now, she became my wife. Maybe, I became fond of her while we are working together. I usually go to work by bike. It takes about thirty minutes but if it is raining I take a bus and it takes good fifty minutes. I work for a company called 삼성SDS. It is a big company and built about thirty years ago. We mainly provide information and communication technology services.

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