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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 26 조회 13528

Eating out

작성자: 1102047346 담당 튜터: Chloe1
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I usually eat out with my family. We visit a specific restaurant after watching movie. The restaurant menu is the mixture of octopus, shrimp, and pork. It is so spicy. That’s why I sweat when I eat it. I need many napkins to wipe out my sweat. After finishing the eating, there are so many napkins that I used to wipe out my sweat like mountain. But my family really like it. We talk about the movie we watched eating the food. Also, we communicate with each other about daily life. And I go to have meat with my best friend after worship in church. We worship in same church. We share our daily life when we have meat. He wants to be a owner of the optical shop. So he talks about the preparation for his business. How he gathered money for his business, or what he read a book about business and so on. I expect the life after we succeed. We dream our fantastic future life when we share our plans having meat. Therefore, I’m happy to have meat with him.
튜터 교정 답변

Hello Jake! Happy Thursday! Here are your corrections. ^_^

 

I usually eat out with my family. We visit a specific restaurant after watching a movie. The restaurant menu is has mixture of octopus, shrimp, and pork. It is so spicy. That’s why I sweat when I eat it. I need a lot of napkins to wipe out my sweat. After finishing the eating, there are a lot of napkins that I used to wipe out my sweat. My family really like it. We talk about the movie we watched after eating. Also, we communicate with each other about daily life. I also eat out with my best friend after worship in church. We worship in the same church. We share our daily life when we eat. He wants to be the owner of an optical shop. So he talks about the preparation for his business. How he gathered money for his business, or what book he read about business and so on. I expect that we will have a good life after becoming successful. We dream about our fantastic future life when we share our plans while eating. Therefore, I’m happy to eat out with him.

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