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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 27 조회 16088

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작성자: 1102047346 담당 튜터: Chloe1
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I'm on the Internet everyday because of my job. When I get tired from doing my work on the computer, I like to surf the Internet. These days, I have been interested in reading a book so I am looking for deals on books. There is a book website I use. The website has many good deals so it is fun to just shop for fun. I search for many books and just read reviews and summaries. Our company gives me some points to use when I want to buy books, movie tickets, musical tickets, vehicle tickets and so on. That’s why I can use the points instead of paying cash. One day, my dad asked a favor for me to buy some books. So I ordered books online by using the point our company gave me. My dad was so glad because I ordered books for him. Sometimes, I surf the Internet when I want to use English dictionary to make perfect English sentences. I can find good expressions. I try to memorize them. I also like to surf the Internet at work to relieve my stress and take some time off from work.
튜터 교정 답변

Hello Jake! Happy Friday! WOW! You are now improving a lot in making lengthy, correct and sensible sentences. I like to commend you for that. Keep up the good work! I hope that you will have a great Friday evening and a happy weekend. Here are your corrections. ^_^

I use the internet everyday because of my job. When I get tired from doing my work on the computer, I like to surf the Internet. These days, I have been interested in reading a book so I am looking for deals on books online. There is a book website that I'm using. The website has many good deals so it is fun to just shop there for fun. I usually search for many books and just read reviews and summaries. Our company gives me some points to use when I want to buy books, movie tickets, musical tickets, vehicle tickets and so on. That’s why I can use the points instead of paying cash. One day, my dad asked me a favor to buy him some books. So I ordered books online by using the points that our company gave me. My dad was so glad because I ordered books for him. Sometimes, I surf the Internet when I want to use the English dictionary to make perfect English sentences. I can find good expressions there too and I try to memorize them. I also like to surf the Internet at work to relieve my stress and take some time off from work.

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