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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 27 조회 16091

Do one~s best !!!

작성자: 1102044240 담당 튜터: Paula
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
My favorite theater is CGV located in 홍대
The theater is huge and about one thousand people can enjoy
the movies at the same time.
The whole building is very clean and modern-looking so i like it.
I go there about twice a week at least.

When i first saw my neighbor song, i thought he looked too serious.
But, once i got to know him i realized he is actually very nice.
You know song and i have a lot in common.
Although we don't always agree on things, I have great respect
for him.
He is really good at handling stress and he gives me a lot of
good advice when i stressed.
He is my neighbor but at the same time he is my mentor.

I love jump rope.
The main reason behind this is to lose weight.
The jump rope is aerobic exercise and it could help us to lose
weight in a shorter period of time comparably.
튜터 교정 답변

My favorite theater is CGV located in 홍대 The theater is huge and about one thousand people can enjoy the movies at the same time. The whole building is very clean and modern-looking so i like it. I go there about twice a week at least.

-> My favorite theater is CGV located in 홍대 The theater is huge and about one thousand people can enjoy the movies at the same time. The whole building is very clean and modern-looking so I like it. I go there about twice a week at least.

When i first saw my neighbor song, i thought he looked too serious. But, once i got to know him i realized he is actually very nice. You know song and i have a lot in common. Although we don't always agree on things, I have great respect for him. He is really good at handling stress and he gives me a lot of good advice when i stressed. He is my neighbor but at the same time he is my mentor.

-> When I first saw my neighbor Song, I thought he looked too serious. But, once I got to know him I realized he is actually very nice. You know Song and I have a lot in common. Although we don't always agree on things, I have great respect for him. He is really good at handling stress and he gives me a lot of good advice when I'm stressed. He is my neighbor but at the same time he is my mentor.

I love jump rope. The main reason behind this is to lose weight. The jump rope is aerobic exercise and it could help us to lose weight in a shorter period of time comparably.

-> I love jump rope. The main reason behind this is to lose weight. The jump rope is an aerobic exercise and it could help us to lose weight in a shorter period of time comparably.

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