My special necklace.
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
My birthday is on October 8th.
Every year, i have a birthday party.
I invited my friends at rastorant.
We eat many foods, and then i open gifts. Last year,
I opened a heart box and saw a very beautiful necklace.
It is golden with golden hearts on it.
I thought it very pretty!
I wear my necklace every day.
It reminds me of my mother.
I hope i never lose my necklace.
Every year, i have a birthday party.
I invited my friends at rastorant.
We eat many foods, and then i open gifts. Last year,
I opened a heart box and saw a very beautiful necklace.
It is golden with golden hearts on it.
I thought it very pretty!
I wear my necklace every day.
It reminds me of my mother.
I hope i never lose my necklace.
튜터 교정 답변
My birthday is on October 8th.
Every year, i have a birthday party.
I always invite my friends at the restaurant.
We eat many foods, and then i open my gifts.
Last year,
I opened a heart box and saw a very beautiful necklace.
It is gold with golden hearts on it.
I thought it's very pretty!
I wear my necklace every day.
It reminds me of my mother.
I hope i never lose my necklace.
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