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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 27 조회 16679

Neighborhood (Role Play)

작성자: 1102047346 담당 튜터: Chloe1
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Where did you move to? I have moved a few times since I was born. I moved to Seoul when I was 3years old. At that time, I was just a baby. So I didn’t remember how I felt when I came to Seoul. Although I was not born in Seoul, I almost grew up in Seoul. I could learn Korean mother tongue not Korean slang. Even I moved several times only in Seoul. I didn’t move out other cities. That’s why I made many friends just in Seoul. What kind of facilities are near your new house? I moved to the house I live now 3 years ago. I liked my new neighborhood because there were some facilities like neighborhood clinic, many supermarkets and theaters. Thanks for theaters near my house, my family can usually enjoy watching movies. I think that it is more convenient living city than the suburbs because I have everything I need near my house. Which one do you like between old town and new town? I think there are some pros and cons. Anyway, I hope you love your new house and you make good memories there.
튜터 교정 답변

Hello Jake! Happy Monday! I'm glad that you like the house where you moved in. Have a great day ahead! Here are your corrections. ^_^

 

Where did you move to? I have moved a few times since I was born. I moved to Seoul when I was 3 years old. At that time, I was just a baby. So I didn’t remember how I felt when I came to Seoul. Although, I was not born in Seoul, I almost grew up in Seoul. I could learn Korean native accent not Korean slang. I moved several times, but only in Seoul. I didn’t move out to other cities. That’s why I have lots of friends only in Seoul. What kind of facilities are there near your new house? I moved to the house that I live in now 3 years ago. I liked my new neighborhood because there are some facilities like neighborhood clinic, many supermarkets and theaters. Thanks for theaters near my house, My family can usually enjoy watching movies. I think that it is more convenient to live in the city than in the suburbs because I have everything I need near my house. Which one do you like better, an old town or new town? I think there are some pros and cons. Anyway, I hope you love your new house and you make good memories there.

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