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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 06. 27 조회 16258

Watching Sports

작성자: 1101160011 담당 튜터: Mitch2
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I enjoy watching soccer. Soccer has been my favorite sports since I was an elementary student.
The team I support is FC barcelona. Because my favorite player Lionel Messi plays as a WingFoward or Striker for that team.
I like him because he is so passionate and so fast drive the ball.
He is very short but He is very fast before anyone else.
I recently watched worldcup match between Argentina verses Nigeria.
The sports game won Argentina. So I`m very fun.
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[CORRECTION]

I enjoy watching soccer. Soccer has been my favorite sports since I was an elementary student.

The team I support is FC barcelona.

--> The team I support is FC Barcelona.

Because my favorite player Lionel Messi plays as a WingFoward or Striker for that team.

--> Because my favorite player Lionel Messi plays as a Wing Forward or Striker for that team.

I like him because he is so passionate and so fast drive the ball.

--> I like him because he is so passionate and he kicks the ball so fast.

He is very short but He is very fast before anyone else.

--> He is very short but he is very fast than anyone else.

I recently watched worldcup match between Argentina verses Nigeria.

--> I recently watched the World Cup match between Argentina versus Nigeria.

The sports game won Argentina. So I`m very fun.

--> Argentina won this sports match. So I had very fun.

[COMMENT]

Hello, Aaron! It's good to know that you enjoy watching soccer game on TV. Well, I guess soccer is the most famous sport in Korea. You were able to tell a lot of detail about your favorite sport. Keep it up!

-Teacher Mitch-

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