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공개 첨삭 완료 2021. 09. 10 조회 10521

Birch tree forest

작성자: bomilee 담당 튜터: Catherine
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
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My town is small, but it has a huge forest.
I like to visit birch tree in the all season.
There are many things to do there.
You can claming the mountain.
You can also taking many beautiful birch tree picture.
It's pretty in any season.
If you get hungry, there are a lot of foods to eat.
Try some mak noddle at the restaurant.
Why don't you visit birch tree forest with your family.
You will have great time.
튜터 교정 답변

My town is small, but it has a huge forest.
I like to visit birch tree in the all season.
There are many things to do there.
You can claming the mountain.
You can also taking many beautiful birch tree picture.
It's pretty in any season.
If you get hungry, there are a lot of foods to eat.
Try some mak noddle at the restaurant.
Why don't you visit birch tree forest with your family.
You will have great time.

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CORRECTION: 

My town is small, but it has a huge forest.
I like to visit the birch trees in all seasons.
There are many things to do there.
You can climb the mountain.
You can also take many beautiful birch tree pictures.
It's pretty in every season.
If you get hungry, there are a lot of foods to eat.
Try some mak noddles at a restaurant.
Why don't you visit the birch tree forest with your family.
You will have a great time.

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