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Join the summing club.

작성자: bomilee 담당 튜터: Catherine
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Are you looking for active club?
Learn to summing!
At the summing club, we learn how to float, swim and dive.
Summing is active and fun.
We meet twice a week and learn new swimacts.
We also shoot videos and post them on YouTube.
Once a month, we have a swimming contest for the whole school.
Com to the swimming pool after school on Mondays and Fridays
튜터 교정 답변

Are you looking for active club?
Learn to summing!
At the summing club, we learn how to float, swim and dive.
Summing is active and fun.
We meet twice a week and learn new swimacts.
We also shoot videos and post them on YouTube.
Once a month, we have a swimming contest for the whole school.
Com to the swimming pool after school on Mondays and Fridays

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CORRECTION:

Are you looking for an active club?
Learn how to swim!
At the swimming club, we learn how to float, swim and dive.
Swimming is active and fun.
We meet twice a week and learn new (swimacts?). - We meet twice a week and learn new strokes.
We also shoot videos and post them on YouTube.
Once a month, we have a swimming contest for the whole school.
Come to the swimming pool after school on Mondays and Fridays

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