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공개 첨삭 완료 2021. 10. 25 조회 9574

2021-10-25 (1)

작성자: dhkim1 담당 튜터: Neal2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I have about $730,000 in my bank accounts. Starting in June 2035, I will receive monthly pension that is about $1,300. The amount of monthly pension will rise according to inflation rate. I don’t own any real estate now. I have thought about what I would do when I am old. I think it would be good for my mental health to work for about 5 hours a day, even if the work does not bring me much money. I am thinking about buying a small fishing boat to become a fisherman. I am thinking about other options, too.
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I have about $730,000 in my bank accounts. Starting in June 2035, I will receive monthly pension that is about $1,300. The amount of monthly pension will rise according to inflation rate. I don’t own any real estate now. I have thought about what I would do when I am old. I think it would be good for my mental health to work for about 5 hours a day, even if the work does not bring me much money. I am thinking about buying a small fishing boat to become a fisherman. I am thinking about other options, too.**

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