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공개 첨삭 완료 2021. 11. 25 조회 9859

I Like K-POP Best.

작성자: bomilee 담당 튜터: Trixie
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I like many types of music, but my favorite genre is K-POP.
I leaned about K-POP music from my friends.
K-POP is performed by a group or a singer.
There are singer and dances on the group.
The songs are usually fast and upbeat.
I always listen to K-POP music walk on the school in the morning.
The music makes me feel better good.
I listen to it until i get to school.
When i draw, i listen to my favorite songs.
They help me relieve stress after a long day.
If you like cheerful music, why don't you listen to.
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I like many types of music, but my favorite genre is K-POP.
I leaned about K-POP music from my friends.
K-POP is performed by group or  solo singer
There are singers and dancers in the group.
The songs are usually fast and upbeat.
I always listen to K-POP music while walking going to my school in the morning.
The music makes me feel better .
I listen to it until i get to school.
When i draw, i listen to my favorite songs.
They help me relieve stress after a long day.
If you like cheerful music, why don't you listen too.

 

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