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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 07. 03 조회 13016

Office description

작성자: 1102047346 담당 튜터: Chloe1
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I work in the sales department and the whole sales department works on our floor. We have many rows of computers where everyone can work at their desk. We also have three conference rooms. In the conference room there is a projector and a white board. These are needed when making presentations and lectures. There are instant coffee at the entry of the office room. I can make coffee when I want to drink it. The special thing about our office is that we are not divided into cubicles. The benefit of this is that I can see my coworkers and we can do our work while we talk to each other. Also, it helps all of the workers to stay on task because our supervisors can easily see what we are doing. However, the bad thing about this is that we don’t have privacy. Sometimes, if I have to make a personal call, I have to be aware of the others around me. Actually our office will be moved out this month. The building is new. I expect the office is more convenient.
튜터 교정 답변

Hi Jake! Happy Thursday! I hope that your new office would be more convenient. Thank you for always sharing your stories. You are really improving a lot! Here are your corrections. ^_^

 

I work in the sales department and the whole sales department works on our floor. We have many rows of computers where everyone can work at their desk. We also have three conference rooms. In the conference room there is a projector and a white board. These are needed when making presentations and lectures. There are instant coffee at the entry of the office room. I can make coffee when I want to. The special thing about our office is that we are not divided into cubicles. The benefit of this, is that I can see my coworkers and we can work while we talking to each other. Also, it helps all of the workers to keep on doing their tasks because our supervisors can easily see what we are doing. However, the bad thing about this is that we don’t have privacy. Sometimes, if I have to make a personal call, I have to be aware of the other people around me. Actually our office will be transferred this month. The building is new. I'm expecting that the new office would be more convenient.

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