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This was I what I wanted to say yesterday.

작성자: leokim@cadence.com 담당 튜터: maya2usa
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
People in Korea believed buddhism from 800 D.C to 1400 D.C.
The dynasty adopted it as a religion to rule the people.
The next dynasty adopted Confucianism as a religion to rule the people from 1400 D.C. to 1900 D.C.
There is no more king in Korea, but the tradition of the two religions is still in our culture; seeking for peace and respecting seniors.
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People in Korea believed in Buddhism from 800 D.C to 1400 D.C.
The dynasty adopted it as a religion to rule the people.
The next dynasty adopted Confucianism as a religion to rule the people from 1400 D.C. to 1900 D.C.
There is no more king in Korea, but the traditions of the two religions are still embedded in our culture; seeking for peace and respecting seniors.

I love this, thank you so much for writing it! I so appreciate learning about your culture, it is truly fascinating and you are definitely giving me a major sense of wanderlust to come visit smiley Your writing is very strong. I only made some minor edits. The names of religions are capitilized so I adjusted that. I also made "tradition" into "traditions" because you listed two types of values in the culture. The addition of the word embedded was just for extra clarity, but the sentence you wrote was still totally grammatically correct. Awesome job. 

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