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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 07. 03 조회 13011

Watching musicals

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Although I watched musicals just several times, I like to watch musicals. The last musical I watched was Momma mia. It is one of the famous musicals worldwide. I watched it when I was travelling in London. The travel was my second going abroad. I wanted to watch a musical. Because London is so famous for musical. London is the home of musical. I hoped to feel musical reality despite of English musical, not Korean. I hesitated about choosing a musical that I would watch. I wanted all, but I didn’t have enough money and time. The options were Momma mia, Lion king and so on. Finally I chose Momma mia. I’m sure the song is included as the top 10 song that all people like. The story is that a lady tried to find her father that go to her wedding. Especially, I was excited when I heard the song Dancing Queen. The actors sang again for encore. All audience screamed and react. The musical is memorable because it was the first that I watched abroad. I can’t forget the impression.
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Hello Jake! Thank you for sharing your stories about watching musical shows. Here are your corrections. ^_^

Although I watched musicals for several times, I still like to watch musicals. The last musical show that I watched was Momma Mia. It is one of the famous musicals worldwide. I watched it when I was travelling in London. The travel was my second going abroad. I wanted to watch a musical. Because London is so famous for musical shows. London is the home of musical. I hoped to feel musical reality despite of English musical, not Korean. I had a hard time about choosing a musical that I would watch. I wanted to watch them all, but I didn’t have enough money and time. The options were Momma Mia, Lion king and so on. Finally, I chose Momma Mia. I’m sure the song Seong is included in the top 10 songs that all people like. The story is about a lady trying to find her father that went to her wedding. I was so excited when I heard the song Dancing Queen. The actors sang again for the encore. The audience screamed and reacted. The musical was memorable because it was the first that I watched a musical abroad. I can’t forget the impression.

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