My memorable project.

Happy Monday Jack!

  I was glad to see your composition again. As I told you, it was really okay. I know that you were in a busy situation too so, it was really unexpected. I prepared a correction for your composition. Please see the following:

Your composition:

Hello~ I'm sorry about delaying today's class. There is a little problem in my schedule because of an unexpecting coversation with my colleague during having breakfast. In spite of my interruption, you were so generous and comprehensive. Thank you. Anyway. I usually move to customer site based on the unit of project. There is an memorable project in my experience. Last year, I joined to a project of a national organization in government. One of our project member hited the other's head by a beer bottle. Maybe their relation was not good while they are cooperating. My project manager called me and requested to go the police-office. I tried to reconcile them by a conversation. But, eventually. One member who hited othere's head was arrested. In this case, I learned that most important thing in mamaging a project is the human relationship. If someone becom a project manager, they should concentrate on and monitor their member's status continously. That's all~

Revised:

Hello! I'm sorry about delaying today's class. There is a little problem with my schedule because of an unexpected conversation with my colleague in the morning. In spite of my interruption, you were so generous and comprehensive. Thank you! Anyway, I usually move to the customer’s site based on the unit of project. There is a memorable experience regarding my project. Last year, I joined a project with the national government organization. One of our project members hit the other member’s head by a beer bottle. Maybe their relation was not good at that time. My project manager called me and requested to go the police office. I tried to make them reconcile by a conversation. But the member who hit the other’s member’s head was arrested. In this case, I learned that the most important thing in managing a project is the human relationship. If someone becomes a project manager, they should concentrate on and monitor their member's status continuously. That's all!

  I was suprised with the experience that you had. I know that you won't let this happen again. Anyway, I hoped I helped you with the correction I made. Have a great day ahead!