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Introduce myself

작성자: kolon_202001338 담당 튜터: ChrisL1usa
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Nice to meet you, Chris Lee (Lee right?)

My name is Sey.
I am content planner & creator at fashion company.
I’m working to transform our fashion business into a metaverse.
I create more depth and immersive human experience by content and digital technology.
I want to create a healthy and efficient fashion ecosystem. Even if we make one piece of clothing, it is the result of solving social problems such as the global environment, human rights, economy, and climate in the most reasonable way. :)

I'm happy to get to know you! I really want to go to Silicon Valley. Have a wonderful day.
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Nice to meet you, Chris Lee (Lee, right?)

My name is Sey.
I am content planner & creator at fashion company.
I’m working to transform our fashion business into a metaverse.
Furthermore, I create more depth and an immersive human experience through content and digital technology.
I want to create a healthy and efficient fashion ecosystem. Even if we make one piece of clothing, it is the result of solving social problems such as the global environment, human rights, economy, and climate in the most reasonable way. :)

I'm happy to get to know you! I would like to go to Silicon Valley someday. Have a wonderful day.

 

I made A couple of little corrections, but what wrote was wonderfully done.  Your work is fascinating to me, and I would certainly like to know more about it and you.  I look forward to our classes together and think we'll have a great time talking.

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