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공개 첨삭 완료 2022. 09. 14 조회 8044

Today lunch

작성자: Tonybin 담당 튜터: Neiz
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Since a long holidays, Chuseok, Korean thanksgiving Day I have been slammed. To save time , I picked sandwich for a lunch and I wanted to have a new menu in a lunch today. A few weeks ago, there was fancy sandwich shop which was opening near in my company.
I thought I visit there soon. As soon as I got that shop, I ordered signature menu by an unattended order.
It melted on my tongue, it's out of this world.
the one was more tasty than I expected and It's worth a return visit.
튜터 교정 답변

Since a long holidays, Chuseok, a Korean thanksgiving day, I have been slammed. To save time, I picked sandwich for a lunch and I wanted to have a new menu for lunch today. A few weeks ago, I saw a fancy sandwich shop opening near my company. 
I thought I will visit there soon. As soon as I got to that shop, I ordered a signature menu an by unattended order.
It melted on my tongue, it's out of this world.
The one was tastier than I expected and it's worth a return visit.

 

 

Some sentences were changed to replace some wordy, faulty tense sequence and unclear sentences. As well as to make it more simplified.

-Teacher Neiz

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