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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 07. 07 조회 14346

this story is a sea of tears ( =fairy tale book)

작성자: 1102044240 담당 튜터: Paula
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I like to read books to my children.
They also loves to read books with me and favorite book is 'a sea of tears(눈물 바다)'.
The book tells a story about a boy.
a boy took a test in school, which he couldn't do it well and he gets told off by his teacher, while playing with his friends.
He didn't feel like rice so came home.
By the time he went back home two dinosaurs fought each other, who suppose to be his parents.
However, this female dinosaur told him off because he could not finish all the foods.
which upset him real bad, the boy went to lying on bed crying.
The boy woke up in the morning and the 'Tears of Sea' was happened to be there because he cried the whole night.

This show's motto is 'Road wild road variety'
It's main concept is to recommend various places of interest that viewers can visit in south korea.
I like this program so much because i have opportunities to know the beauty of our country
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I like to read books to my children. They also loves to read books with me and favorite book is 'a sea of tears(눈물 바다)'. The book tells a story about a boy. a boy took a test in school, which he couldn't do it well and he gets told off by his teacher, while playing with his friends. He didn't feel like rice so came home. By the time he went back home two dinosaurs fought each other, who suppose to be his parents. However, this female dinosaur told him off because he could not finish all the foods. which upset him real bad, the boy went to lying on bed crying. The boy woke up in the morning and the 'Tears of Sea' was happened to be there because he cried the whole night.

-> I like to read books to my children. They also love to read books with me and my favorite book is "A Sea of Tears(눈물 바다)". The book tells a story about a boy. The boy took a test in school, which he couldn't do well and he got scolded by his teacher while playing with his friends. He didn't feel good so he went home. By the time he went back home two dinosaurs were fighting to each other, who suppose to be his parents. However, this female dinosaur scolded him because he could not finish all the food. which upsets him really bad. The boy went to bed crying. The boy woke up in the morning and the 'Sea of Tears'  was there because he cried the whole night.

This show's motto is 'Road wild road variety' It's main concept is to recommend various places of interest that viewers can visit in south korea. I like this program so much because i have opportunities to know the beauty of our country

->The show's title is 'Road wild road variety'. It's main concept is to recommend various places of interest that viewers can visit in South Korea. I like this program so much because I have the opportunity to know the beauty of our country.

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