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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 07. 07 조회 13935

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작성자: 1102044240 담당 튜터: Paula
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Police officers in south korea wear uniforms.
They wear white-shirt, navy ties, and navy pants
Also, they wear hats.
Their main role is to provide a safe environment against crime and accident.
Police cars are white and blue with the police symbol marked on the side. So everybody can easily

When i was little, i used to live in a single-family house.
There were other house, a little playground, and a supermarket.
Everything was so close by and everything was small, unlike these days.
Now the house have become apartment buildings, the little
playground has become a central park, and the supermarket has
become a giant shopping center.
I live in an apartment and it is convenient but sometimes i miss
my old house and the neighborhood.
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Police officers in south korea wear uniforms. They wear white-shirt, navy ties, and navy pants Also, they wear hats. Their main role is to provide a safe environment against crime and accident. Police cars are white and blue with the police symbol marked on the side. So everybody can easily

-> Police officers in South Korea wear uniforms. They wear white-shirt, navy ties, and navy pants. Also, they wear hats. Their main role is to provide a safe environment against crime and accident. Police cars are white and blue with the police symbol marked on the side.

When i was little, i used to live in a single-family house. There were other house, a little playground, and a supermarket. Everything was so close by and everything was small, unlike these days. Now the house have become apartment buildings, the little playground has become a central park, and the supermarket has become a giant shopping center. I live in an apartment and it is convenient but sometimes i miss my old house and the neighborhood.

-> When I was young, I used to live in a single-family house. There were other house, a little playground, and a supermarket. Everything was so close by and everything was small, unlike these days. Now the houses became apartment buildings, the little playground became the central park, and the supermarket became a giant shopping center. I live in an apartment and it is convenient but sometimes I miss my old house and the neighborhood.

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