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공개 첨삭 완료 2022. 12. 06 조회 7462

Tuesday, Desember 6th, 2022 snow

작성자: Tonybin 담당 튜터: Neiz
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
South Korea soccer team matched with Brazil in round of 16 world cup yesterday.
It has been 12 years since 2010 world cup, which went to round of 16.
I am pretty big fan of soccer.
So I felt like i was on cloud nine and can't wait to watch it.
The match kicked off at 4 a.m. My wife and I went to the bed earlier than normal sleep time.
Many people already knew that Brazil is the strongest soccer team in the world.
I think it was very hard challenge to South Korea soccer team.
Although we was beat by Brazil in 4-1, I am very proud of them and root for our team.
튜터 교정 답변

South Korea soccer team had a match with Brazil in round of 16 world cup this morning.
It has been 12 years, since 2010 world cup, when they reached round of 16 as well.
I am a pretty big fan of soccer.
So I felt like I was on cloud nine, and can't wait to watch it.
The match kicked off at 4 a.m. My wife and I went to the bed earlier than our usual sleeping time.
Many people already knew that Brazil is the strongest soccer team in the world.
I think it was very challenging for South Korea soccer team.
Although we were beaten by Brazil with a score of 4-1, I am very proud of them and root for our team.

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