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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 07. 07 조회 12720

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작성자: 1102044240 담당 튜터: Paula
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
When i was a kid, i live in single-family house.
but, now lived in apartment.
We has a good environment and it has a big supermarket, school and park nearby.
So, these days everyone wanna lived in apartment.

When I was a kid, we have four distinct seasons.
Spring, Summer, Autumn and Winter.
Unfortunately, the climate has changed now.
So, The Spring and Autumns are disappeared but only Summer and Winter remains.

I like to listen to music.
But, i just listen'
I did not musical instrument.
If i get the chance I'd like to play the Guitar.
튜터 교정 답변

When i was a kid, i live in single-family house. but, now lived in apartment. We has a good environment and it has a big supermarket, school and park nearby. So, these days everyone wanna lived in apartment.

-> When I was a kid, I lived in a single-family house. But, now I live in an apartment. We have a good environment and it has a big supermarket, school and park nearby. So, these days everyone wants to live in an apartment.

When was a kid, we have four distinct seasons. Spring, Summer, Autumn and Winter. Unfortunately, the climate has changed now.
So, The Spring and Autumns are disappeared but only Summer and Winter remains.

->When I was a kid, we have four distinct seasons. Spring, Summer, Autumn and Winter. Unfortunately, the climate has changed now.  Spring and Autumn are gone but Summer and Winter is still here.

I like to listen to music. But, i just listen' I did not musical instrument. If i get the chance I'd like to play the Guitar.

-> I like to listen to music. But, I just listen because I do not know how to play a musical instrument. If I get the chance I'd like to play the Guitar.

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