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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 07. 07 조회 12824

Chores / Housework

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Being shamed, I was not mostly in charge of doing chores at home when I was a kid. My mom did almost chores like doing the laundry, washing dishes, pressing the clothes by using iron, cleaning the house and so on. At that time, I thought that my mom was a Wonder woman. Although she took responsibilities about house chores, she worked at department store to get money. She was always energetic. That’s why I didn’t think I must do chore. But, the older she is, the worse she exhausted. I decided to do house chores to help her after I did military service. I learned how to do chores at military. So I could help her. I cleaned, wiped my room by using vacuum cleaner and wash clothes. There are 2 people to help my mom. They are my cousin sisters. They live my house. Because their school is so far from their own house. My aunt asked my mom to take care of them. But, they are already adults, not kids. Anyway, we help my mom happily. My mom is satisfied with us.
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Hello Jake! Happy Wednesday! Here are your corrections. ^_^

 

Being shamed, I was not mostly in charge of doing chores at home when I was a kid. My mom did almost all the chores like doing the laundry, washing the dishes, pressing the clothes by using iron, cleaning the house and so on. At that time, I thought that my mom was a Wonder Woman. Aside from doing house chores, she also worked at the department store to get money. She was always energetic. That’s why I didn’t think I must help her But as she grew older, she got exhausted. I decided to do house chores to help her after I did military service. I learned how to do chores at the military. So I could help her. I cleaned, wiped my room by using a vacuum cleaner and washed clothes. My 2 cousins also helped my mom. They live in my house. Because their school is so far from their own house. My aunt asked my mom to take care of them. But, they are already adults not kids. Anyway, we help my mom happily. My mom is satisfied with us.

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