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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 07. 07 조회 13069

Having a pet

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I had a dog, named Babie. She came to my home when I was in elementary school. One winter, my father saw her in the street. He thought that she was a missed pet or her owner dumped her. If she stayed at street, she would die frozen. So he picked her up in the street. Next morning, I saw her in the living room after I woke up. I was so surprised. I can’t forget our first meeting. She approached to me calmly when I called her. I wanted to take care of her. My mom rejected. I pestered her to take care of Babie. Finally, she allowed me to look after Babie. She was a very calm dog, so she doesn’t bark when new people come to the house. That’s good because it doesn’t disturb my neighbors. Even she liked new people with handling her tail. I loved Babie because she kept me from feeling lonely. She passed away this Feb because of getting older. I was sad. But I’m happy because she passed away very comfort with sleeping. I miss her. Babie is the best dog that anyone could ask for.
튜터 교정 답변

Hello Jake! I'm sorry for what happened to your dog. Happy Wednesday! Here are your corrections. ^_^

 

I had a dog, named Babie. I got her when I was in elementary school. One winter, my father saw her in the street. He thought that she was missing or her owner dumped her. If she stayed on the street, she would froze to death. So he picked her up in the street. The next morning, I saw her in the living room when I woke up. I was so surprised. I can’t forget our first meeting. She approached me calmly when I called her. I wanted to take care of her. My mom rejected her. I pestered her to take care of Babie. Finally, she allowed me to look after Babie. She was a very calm dog, so she didn’t bark when new people come to the house. That’s good because it didn’t disturb my neighbors. She even liked it when people hold her tail. I loved Babie because she kept me from feeling lonely. She passed away this Feb because of getting older. I was sad. But I’m happy because she passed away very comfortable with sleeping. I miss her. Babie is the best dog that anyone could have.

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