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공개 첨삭 완료 2023. 01. 17 조회 6532

My last weekend

작성자: Tonybin 담당 튜터: Neiz
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
One of my closed friends came to my house with his family on last weekend.
He has a cute and lovely daughter who is eight years old.
She is two years older than my daughter, So they have similar common interests like playing a dull, coloring a picture.
His family slept in my house at that time.
Two girls were very happy and fun. Nobody wanted to sleep. They went to bed at 2:30 A.M.
Next day, time to say good bye was coming to them.
Right after she was leaving, my daughter cried a bit.
튜터 교정 답변

One of my close friends came to my house with his family on last weekend.
He has a cute and lovely daughter who is eight years old.
She is two years older than my daughter, so they have similar common interests like playing a doll and coloring a picture.
His family slept in my house at that time.
The two girls were very happy and had fun. Nobody wanted to sleep. They went to bed at 2:30 A.M.
The next day, it's time to say goodbye was coming to for them.
Right after she was leaving left, my daughter cried a bit.

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