Making sentences using expressions in previous class

I have been involved in the a big project. It could make or break the sales score of the company, so I prompted myself to focus on that. One day, something popped into my head about the preject project and I told that to the team leader in a details. But the new idea fell on deaf ears. After that, I didn't say anything to them.

Hi Tony,

It's impressive that you managed to use most of the expressions appropriately and kept in mind the meaning. I just made some changes and added some article to make the statement simpler and more comprehensible so that there won't be misinterpretation in conveying these. Also, be mindful of using the proper words and spelling. Other than that, every thing seems excellent. Keep it up!

Teacher Neiz