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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 07. 08 조회 13108

My Projrct

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I had done many projects that created IT systems until fifteen years ago.
At that time, my job is computer programmer.
My job is to manage of department now.
As a manager of department, i had several projects.
One of them, it was system quality improvement project.
I was in charge of composing quality organization and optimization of it.
Although it spent many times because of simulation, but we kept the
deadline at last. So we are preparing next project.
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I had done many projects that created by IT systems until fifteen years ago.

At that time, my job is was computer programmer.

My job is to manage of the department now.

As a manager of the department, i had several projects. One of them, it was system quality improvement project.

I was in charge of composing quality organization and optimization.

Although  it we spent many times because of simulations, but we kept the deadline at last.

So we are preparing for the next project.

 

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