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공개 첨삭 완료 2023. 05. 21 조회 4879

Making sentences using the expressions I learned previous class.

작성자: Tonybin 담당 튜터: Neiz
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학생 제출 원문
No doubt, all employees think one of executives must be workaholic. He commutes 7.am and gets off at late night.
He seems to think of work 24/7 all the way. He is straightforward.
when it comes to the work, he always speaks his mind directly, so my employees in the company felt deeply wounded by his words.
But, he requests to get them work a lot.
튜터 교정 답변

No doubt, all employees think one of the executives must be a workaholic. He commutes at 7a.m. and gets off at late at night. He seems to think of about work 24/7 all the way. He is straightforward when it comes to the work, he always speaks his mind directly, so my the employees in the company felt deeply wounded by his words. But, he requests to get them work a lot.

 

REVISED:

No doubt, all employees think one of the executives must be a workaholic. He commutes at 7a.m. and gets off late at night. He seems to think of about work 24/7 all the way. He is straightforward when it comes to work, he always speaks his mind directly, so the employees in the company felt deeply wounded by his words. But, he requests to get them work a lot.

 

Hi Tony,

Good work with this composition as you tried to use the expressions from the previous lesson. Most words were appropriate and only few corrections were removed or changed. Just always be careful when using all the expressions so that the sentence won't be too complicated to understand. Keep going!

 

Teacher Neiz

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