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공개 첨삭 완료 2023. 06. 12 조회 5482

A diary on Monday

작성자: Tonybin 담당 튜터: Neiz
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I read a article about Monday blues early in the morning.
To put it simply, some people experience sadness, anxiety, or just an overall sense of unhappiness on the first day of a week, which is often Monday.
I think It's the reason that following enjoyable and relaxing weekend, people are required to return to the work schedule.
In my case, I don't usually feel like those things. Nicely, I just feel a bit tired on Monday.
So when I got to the office, I usually organize To-do-list in a week fast.
튜터 교정 답변

I read an article about Monday blues early in the morning. To put it simply, some people experience sadness, anxiety, or just an overall sense of unhappiness on the first day of the week, which is often Monday. I think it's the reason that following after an enjoyable and relaxing weekend, people are required to return to the work schedule.
In my case, I don't usually feel like those things. Well, I just feel a bit tired on Monday. So when I get to the office, I usually organize my to-do list in a week's fast.

 

REVISED:

I read an article about Monday blues early in the morning. To put it simply, some people experience sadness, anxiety, or just an overall sense of unhappiness on the first day of the week, which is often Monday. I think it's the reason after an enjoyable and relaxing weekend, people are required to return to work. In my case, I don't usually feel those things. Well, I just feel a bit tired on Monday. So when I get to the office, I usually organize my to-do list in a week's fast.

 

Hi Tony, 

I read both of your compositions and this my comment for both. As you can see, I just changed some sentences to make it clearer and on point. Furtheremore, I changed and adverb here, particularly the word "nicely", just for you to have more reference as well. I'll include below some advaerbs that you can use as well. Thank you for this and keep on practicing!

 

Other terms for Nicely:

pleasantly
pleasingly
agreeably
delightfully
beautifully
well
enjoyably
amusingly

 

 

Teacher Neiz

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