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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 07. 09 조회 13121

Shopping

작성자: 1102047346 담당 튜터: Chloe1
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Many people like to shop but I don’t enjoy shopping. Because shopping makes me tired. I have to walk around the department store to find something like shoes or clothes. Also I need to check the price what is more cheap. It is boring. My mom usually buy something for me. She works at a department store. Therefore, she can buy something cheap price. I don’t need to care about bargain sales. I just choose whether I will take it, or not. She have a good sense about choosing stuff. So I mostly agree. Instead of not shopping, I spend my money to buy books. I’m happy when I see my book shelves with many books. I like reading a book. I often buy books through Internet site. After paying, the site gives me some points that I can use when I want to buy books. Also it gives me some discounts. If I order books before 11 AM, I can mostly take the books until that night. The delivery fee is free! It is very comfortable and advantageous.
튜터 교정 답변

Hi there Jake! Good evening! Here are your corrections. ^_^

 

Many people like to go shopping, but I don’t enjoy shopping because shopping makes me tired. I have to walk around the department store to find something like shoes or clothes. Also, I need to check the price to find out which is cheaper. It is boring. My mom usually buy something for me. She works at a department store. Therefore, she can buy something at a cheap price. I don’t need to care about bargain sales. I just choose whether I will take it, or not. She have a good sense about choosing stuffs. So, I mostly agree with her. Instead of shopping, I just spend my money on buying books. I’m happy when I see my book shelves with a lot of books. I like reading books. I often buy books on the internet. After paying, the site gives me some points that I can use when I want to buy books. Also, it gives me some discounts. If I order books before 11 AM, I can mostly take the books until that night. The delivery fee is free! It is very comfortable and advantageous.

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