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공개 첨삭 완료 2023. 08. 01 조회 5334

Making sentences using expressions I learned from the previous class

작성자: Tonybin 담당 튜터: Neiz
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I studied topic about 'single-use plastic in last class.
Single-use plastic is a big issue in the world and amount of it has been soared fast since in 2010.
We usually use it every single day unconsciously. Also, Many sorts of plastic are everywhere in our life like plastic cup, bag, container, cutlery etc.
We must cut down amount of plastic right away and find out great the way to reduce plastic in our life.
Both the government and people are doing something. The government make a ban regulation against plastic.
We can use substitude good instead of plastic.
튜터 교정 답변

I studied a topic about single-use plastic in last class.
Single-use plastic is a big issue in the world, and the amount of it has been soared fast since in 2010. We usually use it every single day unconsciously. Also, many sorts of plastic in our life are everywhere like plastic cups, bags, containers, cutlery, etc. We must cut down the amount of plastic used right away as soon as possible and find out a great the way to reduce plastic. in our life

Both the government and people are doing something. The government make implemented a ban regulation against plastic. We can use substitute goods instead of plastic.

 

REVISED:

I studied a topic about single-use plastic last class. Single-use plastic is a big issue in the world, and the amount of it has soared fast since in 2010. We usually use it every single day unconsciously. Also, many sorts of plastic in our life are everywhere like plastic cups, bags, containers, cutlery, etc. We must cut down the amount of plastic used as soon as possible and find a great way to reduce plastic. Both the government and people are doing something. The government implemented a ban regulation against plastic. We can use substitute goods instead of plastic.

 

 

Hi Tony,

Thank you for staying relevant in giving a composition using the expressions and topics we just had during the last class. A few changes were made to appropriately relate the sentences and words to relay a clearer message or already too wordy. But all in all, you were able to give a complete opinion and ideas, still I'm looking forward for more!

 

Teacher Neiz

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