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공개 첨삭 완료 2023. 10. 23 조회 4475

A diary on last saturday

작성자: Tonybin 담당 튜터: Neiz
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
It was our 6th wedding anniversary on last Saturday.
We talked about our plan which we will do like activities at that time.
There are always two things we do together every single year. First, we take a picture by ourself without a photographer.
We think we keep a record and remember how old we are getting.
Secondly, we visit fancy and unique restaurants as it's pretty special day.
튜터 교정 답변

It was our 6th wedding anniversary on last Saturday.
We talked about our plan which we will do, like activities, at that time.
There are always two things we do together every single year. First, we take a picture by ourself ourselves without a photographer.
We think that we keep a record and remember how old we are getting.
Secondly, we visit fancy and unique restaurants as it's a pretty special day.

 

REVISED:

It was our 6th wedding anniversary last Saturday. We talked about our plan which we will do, like activities, at that time.
There are always two things we do together every single year. First, we take a picture by ourselves without a photographer. We think that we keep a record and remember how old we are getting. Secondly, we visit fancy and unique restaurants as it's a pretty special day.

 

Hi Tony,

Thank you for sending a composition again. It was simple and there were only very ew corrections changed. I hope you can keep on making compositions. 

 

Teacher Neiz

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